Hey guys, so a lot of people from my TikTok had a lot of issues with the google doc so I decided to post this here one more time just so you guys can copy and paste it and save it to your own computer.
Green: Scholarships Emails
Yellow: Admissions Emails
Blue: Scholarship Essay example
Pink: Admissions Essay example
Tips for emails
1. Don’t make it too long but be detailed and include all information they want you to
2. Watch grammar and punctuation
3. Always introduce yourself
For inquiring (asking if they had scholarships):
Hello,
My name is (name), and I am currently a Junior/Senior at (name of high school). I wanted to reach out to you because I was wondering if you/your organization/name of business offered any scholarships.
(Then tell them a little bit more about yourself but not too much, about 3-5 sentences. You can change it any way you want I’m just going to put an example.) I am currently hoping to pursue a Bachelor’s degree in _______ at (name of college) starting Fall of 2021. Currently, I am (Leadership position/ athlete for my schools___ team/ working at ____). Overall, I have a ____ GPA and am ____th in my class. Please let me know if your organization/ name of Business offers scholarships and if you think I would be a good fit.
Thank you in advance,
(Full name)
Email for if you already know they offer scholarships and are just turning in the application:
(Side note: when submitting your application through email, sometimes it will tell you to also include your birthday, college your plan to attend or other information so pay attention to that)
Hello,
My name is (name), and I am currently a Junior/Senior at (name of high school). I wanted to submit my application and/or documents for the (name of scholarship) scholarship. I’ve attached the material to this email. Please let me know if there is anything else you need from me!
Thank you so much for this opportunity,
(Full name)
Thank you letter for receiving scholarship:
Hello Miss/Mister,
I am writing to thank you for your generous [Name of scholarship] scholarship award.
I was very happy and appreciative to learn that I was selected as the recipient of your scholarship.
I am a ____ major and am I planning on to pursue a career in ___ upon graduating from (name of college). I am currently a junior/senior at (name of high school) and plan to graduate in the spring of 2021. After graduation, I will continue my education at (name of college) to earn my bachelor’s degree. Thanks to you, I am one step closer to that goal.
By awarding the [Name of scholarship] to me, you have lightened my financial burden which allows me to focus more on the most important aspect of school, learning. Your generosity has inspired me to help others and give back to the community. I hope one day I will be able to help students achieve their goal just as you have helped me.
Thank you,
(full name)
Email to your college admissions counselor for questions:
Hello Miss/Mister (name of your admission counselor),
My name is (your name). I recently applied to/ want to apply to (name of college) as a Freshman for Fall of 2021. I was wondering if you could help me with a question I had regarding (your problem/ question).
Thank you so much in advance,
(your name)
Email to submit your unofficial SAT/ACT scores or transcript:
(Try to find your admissions counselor on the colleges website if you can’t find it try the overall admission email)
Hello Miss/Mister (name of your admission counselor),
My name is (your name). I recently applied to (name of college) as a Freshman for Fall of 2021. I got this email from the (name of University) website. I was wondering if I can turn in my SAT/ACT Score Report/transcript to you. I’ve attached the score report to this email.
Thank you so much in advance,
(your name)
Email to set up a interview (only a guideline, adapt as necessary)
Hello Miss/Mister (name of your admission counselor),
My name is (your name). I recently applied to/ am applying (name of college) as a Freshman for Fall of 2021. I got this email from the (name of University) website. I was wondering if it would be possible for me to set up an interview for me to get a better feel if (name of college) is the right fit for me. OR I was wondering if (name of college) recommends interviews for applicants. If so would it be possible for me to set one up?
Thank you so much in advance,
(your name)
Essay Examples/ Layout examples:
I have personal examples, these are some examples.
My personal example that I submitted for the $5,000 scholarship I got is below. Keep in mind that you can always change your mind later. I no longer want to do what I detailed in that essay, so it’s more like a ‘what do you want to do in the future as of right now”.
Prompt: What are your career and educational goals?
My overall goal is to become a lawyer, specifically for either immigration or human rights. I would like to one day work for the United Nations in order to advocate and enforce the equity for every person in the world. In order to achieve my career goal I want to first go to St. Philip’s College to finish up my associates degree during the summer between my senior year of high school and college. I then plan to enroll at the University of Texas in San Antonio for the Fall of 2020 for a Bachelors of Arts in Political Science and Spanish. Upon graduation, I will attend law school at the University of Texas- Austin Law School. It is my dream law school! While at law school I will work towards not only my Juris Doctorate but also a Magister Legum in Human Rights. I hope to also work towards a masters degree in Spanish either while in law school or after. I believe a masters in Spanish would be a great addition to my academic record because my career goals are in fields that require a lot of international communication especially in predominantly Spanish-speaking countries.
The reason why I chose the colleges I did is because of the fact that I feel very at home in San Antonio, and Texas in general. I've felt that way ever since I moved here from Bavaria, Germany when I was 15. Many of my mom's American friends would always say that Texas is the Bavaria of the United States, and ever since I live here I can say with certainty it is. I feel that I have just settled into living here and I feel at home here now, so why would I leave? This is why I decided to go to college here in Texas. Also, the reason why I decided to become a lawyer for human rights’ or immigration is because of the community I moved into when I came to San Antonio. Many of the people are immigrants. I heard many stories about lawyers taking advantage of these families and that is not okay. I choose to pursue this career as a lawyer because of this realization that not many lawyers practice law for the right reason, but I will. Law needs the empathy I can bring!
My personal example for this prompt:
“What does this scholarship mean to you?
Within the essay you must also address: Career Goals/Plans Upon Graduation, Extracurricular Activities & Leadership Positions held in High School, Community Service Activities and/ or Hobbies and/or Special Interests” (Side note: i just write this because I had to submit it for my Presidential scholarship so they would show the donors. I wrote it really quickly and it’s not the best or edited but it’s one of the only essays I still have.)
This scholarship means a lot to me. To be more specific, this scholarship allows me to go to college, without burdening myself or my family with how we will pay for my college. I am getting a chance at life to get a college degree and not have to take out loans or work full-time to sustain my degree. I am allowed to 100% focus on being great in college and when I graduate, my first priority won’t be to pay off my loan, but rather to find something I love doing and pursuing that.
My career goals after graduating are either becoming a Professor or working internationally for a non-profit or business in a job related to communication. I want to intern a year abroad, with my top choices being either South Korea or Australia. I also want to get a master’s degree after graduation in order to pursue my other dreams of maybe becoming a Professor.
During high school I was involved in many extracurricular activities. I was the President of the Business Professionals of America club and the Leadership Club. I was the social media manager for the Parent-Teacher-Student Organization as well as an Editor for our school newspaper. During summers, I was a delegate for the National Student Leadership Conference at Yale University for Law and Advocacy, as well as for the Congress of Future Medical Leaders and the International Leadership Conference in Davos, Switzerland. I also got the opportunity to intern with the Methodist Healthcare Ministries of South Texas as a qualitative data entry intern.
Besides that, I served as the Junior Class Secretary where I contributed community service by making angel trees for underprivileged schools in our district during Christmas and volunteered more than 80 hours throughout high school. I volunteered at the Veterans library on Fort Sam Houston as well as at the Haven For Hope Soup Kitchen and homeless shelter.
In my free time I also loved engaging in hobbies such as reading and with that actively being part of a book club.
Currently, I also love spending time at my job at the German-Texan Heritage Society where I teach German to kids between the ages of 3 to 6 years old.
My personal Essay example (I received a $2,000 scholarship for this essay)
Prompt: Why Education is important to you?
Since I was young my mom has told me the story of how she begged my grandfather to go to college. She always wanted to be a psychologist and honestly, I couldn’t see a better fit job for her than that. She wants to help people like my dad who are Veterans suffering Post-Traumatic-Stress-Disorder. She told me that back then my grandfather had told her that only one person in the family can go and since she was a woman that would only ever get married and have kids my uncle should go instead of her. Because of her not being able to go to college and regretting that for as long as I can remember, she has always made sure to encourage me to go to college. When I was younger -maybe 10 or 11- I didn’t understand why she would say “You are going to college, I don’t care what job you get after that or what degree, but you are going to college.”
Back then I was a little too young to appreciate the support and was set on being the next big actress, even though I have both stage fright and a fear of talking in front of people. Fast forward a little, and my mom is now going to college to finish her degree in psychology. I have seen the positive impact it has made on her. Of course, we all like to complain about the homework and the projects but you should see the look on my mom’s face when she got admitted to her college’s honors society or when she found out she has a 3.95 GPA. I have never seen my mom happier than now and the confidence she has gained in herself in something that she could not have gotten anywhere but college. She is so excited to fulfill her dreams and so eager to start working to help others. It is what inspires me and makes me sure that formal education is an important step in every person’s life that has the opportunity to pursue it!
Over 5 years later, I finally understand my mom and am beyond blessed to have her support embarking on this new journey of my life. Of course, having a formal education is important for employability and in order to get the life you always wanted, but it can be so much more than that. Formal education helps develop who you are and gives you the resources to find something that makes you passionate and turn that into your job. Of course, your passion won’t always be your job, but seeing what is available to you through college is a good start to go into the direction you want to. Through talking to colleges and my amazing College Counselor -Miss Perez- I figured out that even though I love Politics, Communications would be the best approach for me to get a good job that I will love doing. And that is one of the beauties of formal education, while it is “formal” it is not one size fits all, and completely personal to you. You can go to your best fit college; get the degree you are interested in and pursue your dream.
Even if you have no idea yet about where your place is the world, formal education -such as a college degree- can help you make a better life for yourself and your future families and generations to come after you. For me specifically, getting a formal and good education is important to make sure that should I ever have a daughter, she will never think that because she is a woman she cannot go to college. On top of that it is also important because I will be paying tribute to my mom, who is the sole reason I have the opportunity and encouragement to be able to go through the amazing and scary journey that is college.
Admissions Essay example
My personal admissions essay that I used for all of the colleges I applied to (applied to and was accepted at all 70) This is kind of personal and everyone writes differently so please don’t hate, it's only a guidance, not something to copy.
Prompt: The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?
When I was younger, maybe 12, I would often walk to my local supermarket while my Mother was still at work. I remember her telling me that the money she gave me in the morning was the last of it until her next paycheck. Sometimes she would tell me, “Nicht heute, Tyla” which means “Not today, Tyla.” Whenever she would say that, I knew we were down to our last 10€ or 20€ and we might have to skip a meal in order to pay rent or other bills. I knew my Mother was working to make ends meet. Yet sometimes they were left unmet, to the point of her own mental and physical exhaustion. As a result, she made the decision to leave Germany, even though I tried, to the best of my ability, to help.
Both of us never lived outside of our Motherland and knew only basic English vocabulary when we stepped foot on American soil for the first time in Atlanta’s airport. We continued our journey by car to Leesville, Louisiana, where, for the first time in more than 2 years, we met my Father. After living in Louisiana for no more than a week, my Father came over to tell my Mother and I,“I got a job in San Antonio. We’re moving again!” After yet another adventure in house hunting and exploring my new home, we settled into a little neighborhood called Miller Ranch where we now live in the last house within the city borders.
Today, I feel blessed for my family being in better financial shape than it was in the years before. For the first time in my life, I live in a house that we own and not rent. Additionally, I’m able to travel and I never have to wonder again where my next meal is coming from or when.
In fact, the experiences I’ve had over the years, taught me to be humble and made me appreciate the little things. My challenges contributed to my desire to help others through difficult situations such as moving to a new country. Additionally, having lived in completely opposite countries and communities has given me an opportunity of unique insight on aspects of life, such as different social classes and cultural celebrations from around the world.
After an initial culture shock when entering the community, I now call it my home. I learned to be a proud German girl, who celebrates Fiesta, listens to Reggaeton and knows that Texas is not just a place of cowboys, unless it’s rodeo time, while remembering my own roots and where I came from. Through my multicultural and international experiences I learned to have an open mind in order to initiate collaboration and communication between the people in my life. Lastly, my life journey has made me understand the importance of empathy. Being passionate and caring are traits that could help me make the best out of the college experience for every student on campus.
All together, my vivacious personality is a direct result of how my life experiences have affected me. How they have contributed to my learning and my growth in the cultures and environment I have grown and adapted in. I think back at what my mom used to say to me and every time I wake up now I feel like it’s finally the day. It sounds like she’s saying: “Ja, heute, Tyla.” which means “Yes, today, Tyla.”
